Monday, 16 September 2013

Winter Woods

Deep in the winter woods, past hypnotised trees and mysterious footprints you will find a deserted cabin with its door wide open. Icicles are hanging from its roof. There is a full moon with bats circling around it. By hunter
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9 comments:

  1. Josie Woon23 September 2013 at 14:26

    Sounds cold and scary, how did you come up with that idea?
    Natahlia

    How big were the footprints? Was it an animal or something else?
    Hana

    Room 9 Rockets

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  2. Brenda Mcgregor15 October 2013 at 01:15

    Wow Hunter I love that detailed description. It certainly captured my interest. I would like to hear the rest of the story.

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  3. Powerful Learners in Room 7!20 October 2013 at 13:31

    Hi Hunter my name is Ashton
    Wow!!! That is really really exiting even know it was really short it was interesting. Next time maybe you could make a sound like (the door was left creaking open.) I liked the part of your story that you said mysterious footprints. How big were they? I also like how you said icicles hanging off the roof. Well done. What does hypnotized mean? Also next time could you use a simile and onomatopoeia.
    From Ashton
    Room 7
    Vardon

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  4. Powerful Learners in Room 7!20 October 2013 at 13:32

    Hi hunter
    My name is Kaspar.
    Wow I love how you used heaps of Wow words like Mysterious and Hypnotised
    and the story sounds very, very, very scary and what does hypnotised mean? Next time you could use some similes
    From Kaspar
    room 7
    Vardon

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  5. Josie Woon20 October 2013 at 13:39

    Wow those bats sounds really scarey. By Kyrah
    That story sounds scarey, I would never want to go by that cabin in the woods. By Patience

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  6. Powerful Learners in Room 7!20 October 2013 at 15:23

    Hi I am Fin and I am in Room 7 at Vardon school
    Wow Interesting story. I like your writing because it is exciting and interesting.Next time I reckon you should make your story a little longer and I wonder what happens.
    From Fin

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  7. Anonymous4 November 2013 at 17:38

    That sounds verey interesting Hunter . We are room 3 at T.P.S in tauranga. have you ever seen our beautiful beaches.
    by Emily .

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  8. Anonymous11 November 2013 at 17:19

    Wow hunter that sounds cold and scary.
    We are room three @ t.p.s.
    From scott

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  9. Anonymous11 November 2013 at 17:35

    i this is room3 what a amazing story you added lots of descriptive words.I bet your going to be a great writer.

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